Sunday, April 01, 2012

"That Last Night"

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 26; the 26th Edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The topic for this month is 'That Last Night'.

Jillian’s heart was pounding. She was sweating. Restless. "This would change my life," Jillian thought. "Should I go or not?" she wavered.

Her phone rang. She picked it up. It was Vie, her heart throbbed.

“Are you ready, honey? I will come pick you up few minutes from now.”

Her heart almost skipped a beat. He was serious with his proposal. “Oh my God,” she uttered. Panic stricken all over her face. Hanky wet with perspiration that continuously ran down her forehead, cheeks and nape. Jillian was scared whether she was doing the right thing.

The moment of truth dawned on Jillian. She was deeply in love with him but had not til this day got intimate. She’s almost there; soon she will cross the Rubicon.


“Beep, beep,” his car went honking in front of her house. He was there. That debonair of a man who made her knees weak. Her palpitations went faster.

Unconsciously as if in a daze Jillian walked to his car and got in quickly to avoid being seen with him.

The moment the car with tinted glass closed, he pulled her towards him for a hug and gave her a long and passionate kiss on her mouth. She could hardly resist and she responded with equal fervor. He stopped the car thrice on the way.

They soon reached a fine dining resto and went to the corner table that was reserved for him. There was a woman in formal dress seated already which Vie had not informed. The moment that lady in white saw them, she stood up with her hands extended and said “Welcome Jillian. I am happy Vie could persuade you to come for his birthday. You are one of our best friends”

Jillian was taken aback. Did Vie know that his wife would be there and why he then brought her here, Jillian wondered? Hiding her surprise Jillian said, “I could not refuse Vie when he said you will be here and that you were expecting me.”


“Don’t think I am that sweet. I am a bit selfish. I am to go right away to the airport to receive our chairman from New York. I didn’t want my hubby to miss his birthday. It struck me why not call Jillian to fill in my place. Thanks Jillian. I am off now. Take care as Vie can get mischievous ideas.” She kissed her husband and left in a hurry.

Vie’s wife was not a good looking woman. She was very short, looked bland, dark, with her teeth not aligned well. Vie was a tall and handsome man. They were surely not made for each other. Jillian pitied him.

She was shaken from her reverie when she heard Vie. “Honey, come on, finish eating fast. Let us go to our room that I have booked.”

She realized he was serious about his intent to make the night memorable. She remained silent when he settled the bill and walked behind him like a willing victim.

Once inside, he closed the door and said, “The moment we have been waiting for has arrived at last. Let us make this night a memorable one, especially it's my birthday.”

As he came forward to embrace her, she said, "I am sorry Vie. I have second thoughts. Your wife may look like a plain Jane but her heart is pure gold. She is trusting and knowing your nature she even warned me. I will not betray her trust. Let this be the last night when we could have gone wrong. I love you with all my heart but I love and respect her trust in me more. I am sorry, let me go.” She said and walked out in tears.


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39 comments:

  1. Wonderful writing and wonderful to read Amity.

    Yvonne.

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  2. Thanks so much Yvonne...am back writing after a long break...:)

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  3. Glad it ended the way it did. Had it been otherwise, the story would have left a bad after-taste. But it didn't.

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  4. Thanks for the nice reaction miss_teerious...:) Do you have an entry too?

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  5. Yes. It' s the first time I have participated in BAT. My entry is here: http://mysterious-kaddu.blogspot.com/2012/04/that-last-night.html

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  6. Glad it ended the way it did. Had it been otherwise, the story would have left a bad after-taste. But it didn't.

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  7. Yes. It's the first time I've participated. My post is here: http://mysterious-kaddu.blogspot.com/2012/04/that-last-night.html

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  8. Though Jilian started out for fun and excitement, she  showed at the end her  true character.Amity has etched  out admirably the two dominant traits in the two women making for a delectable story-one the  trusting nature of the wife in her friend  and the unbetraying streak by the friend of the faith reposed  in her

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  9. Thanks much for the wonderful comment KP...:) Seldom do we find two women loving the same person with admirable traits...lucky man he must be!

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  10. Even if Jillian lost her love, and even if the wife found out her trust in Jillian was well-founded, I guess the man had nothing to lose. All the best for BAT!

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  11. Gem of a piece, The trust and the love, the end too, is remarkable. Very seldom do I see such command and beautiful play of words. Could have gone astray, but cleverly penned.

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  12. Thanks much Pramodlohia...:) I like your comment on this...Do you also have an entry to BAT 26? Or are you participating at BAT?

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  13. Felt at ease reading it. Nice use of words. Nice story.

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  14. Good to read about two good women in a story .. that is very rare you know!! :-)

    Joke apart, I think respecting love and trust is the key to any relationship .. and you have captured it so well. Very unconventional end .. the surprise was too good. 

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  15. Thanks much Deepak...:) Glad you felt that way while reading! :)

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  16. True Aativas...very rare...because the usual thing is, the other woman is bad..:)
    Glad you noticed the unconventional end, not the stereotyped love stories we often read...and you found the ending a surprise!

    Thanks much! :)

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  17. The story of the other woman and her virtues. Such a rare tale; for more often than not, the other side of the story is always left unheard. 
    Loved the lucidity. 

    All the best for BAT.  :)

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  18. The story of the other woman! Such a rare tale; for more often than not the other side of the story and its justifications always remain unheard.
    Loved the lucidity.

    All the best for BAT!

    ~eNcHaNtA

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  19. Excellent flow and language, Amity. It was an effortless read. Really enjoyed. As far as the story goes, I felt the plot was a bit simplistic.

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  20. How I wish in reality, women could be so practical and unselfish...a simple story narrated so spontaneously...that is beauty in itself. Loved reading it. 
    All the best.

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  21. hey Amity, loved this post. Hadn't expected that she will change her mind in the end. 

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  22. aww sweet :) pointing out at people and their lifestyle 

    nice :)

    all the best :)  ^__^

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  23. awesome :)
    lifestyle shown out in plain :)

    all the best :)

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  24. Thanks so much Enchanta...
    Yeah you are right, such  a rare story line...because the usual thing is the other way around...:)

    I Wish you all the best too!

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  25. Thanks The Fool! :)
    The simplicity of the plot gives us a lesson or two!

    Thanks for enjoying the read!

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  26. Thanks much Cherry...:)
    Glad you loved reading it :)))

    All the best too!

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  27. Thanks a lot Sankar!

    I wish you all the best too! :)

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  28. Thanks again Sankar! 
    This second might be due to moderation in my comment page...sorry about that!

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  29. Very very smooth read. I think this was a simple and well written post.

    If you want my honest opinion - I expected more from you :)

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  30. Oh really? Thanks for the kind comments Kshitij...:-)
    More from me? Maybe in my next BAT entry...:D

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  31. Quite a good story. All the best 

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  32. Thanks Maverick..."-) I wish you the same!

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  33. It is a very rare story-line and you did the best.. Simply superb.. Smiles Mom!

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  34. We never get to hear what the one in the shadows has to say. This was definitely worth reading because here, we did. Lovely story.
    :)

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  35. Sure. Looking forward :)

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