Saturday, May 01, 2010

Escape

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 10; the tenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton

He tried to scribble a word or two                         
But his thoughts escaped and flew faster
Than the pen could keep pace and make him do…

He tried to catch her like that lovely butterfly
But before he could come near it
Escaped him and flew away so high…

He tried to clasp her in his hands
But she escaped his grasp little by little
Like an hour-glass the tiny sands…

He tried to comb through dense crowd
For that face that could launch a thousand ships
But escaped his eyes never to be found…

He tried to look for that brightest star in the sky
To see her winsome wink and charming twinkle
But she escaped him as the thick, dark clouds rolled by…

He tried to imprison her in his heart
But like a bird craving to be liberated and set free
Escaped the warm nook in which she was caught

Escape…escape…is all she wants in everything
So vague, so obscure and so elusive...
Why is she so impervious to his deep yearning?



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Written for Blog-a-Ton (Prompt: Escape)

49 comments:

  1. ah... the woman!! omg i always find this little hmmm! nice one amity..:)

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  2. I always love to read poems as entries of BATOM. This is a good piece, too. All the best for BATOM 8. :)

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    PS: Visit http://bit.ly/shewasenough

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  3. these are some very beautiful thoughts..i think they capture the underlying philosophy very well.Good one.

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  4. Isn't it obvious? She doesn't love him and he wants to keep her caged.
    Well, nice poem. :)
    All the best for blog-a-ton. :)

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  5. Nice lines capturing the theme realistically.

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  6. very nice Amity.. even I like poems for BATOM10.. :)

    all the best!

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  7. He never really deserved her, this is all I have to say after reading this !
    First time to your blog, and I'm impressed .. all the best for your BAT :)

    ..escape !

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  8. Hey welcome 2 blog-a-ton amity.. Gr8 2 hav u onboard :)

    A vry intrsting poem thr.. u'v already visitd my post bt i'v posted anothr entry, a poem nd it cn b considered as my advice to the poor guy in this poem.. do read it :)

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  9. @ Amity

    Truly beautiful rhymes and prose!
    Loved each line interlocked with escape tint!


    ~Keep the Spark ALive..

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  10. Excellent take on the escape topic. Seeing some of the other comments, I wonder if it is being interpreted as you intended. My interpretation - a lover lorn man's longing for his elusive beloved. Not like he really wants to imprison her in a real physical sense or anything. To a lover, his beloved appears distant and unattainable. Look forward to your clarification on what your intended. Best of luck for Blog-a-ton.

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  11. I have this thing for poets! Good job and keep writing.

    Sureindran R. - Escape

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  12. Hey HaRy;

    You've been so busy for a long time na!

    But thanks you're here, again...:)

    Have a beautiful Sunday!

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  13. The Virgin Author;

    Thank you so much!

    I am more inclined to poetry than prose writing!

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  14. Dear Amity,
    NAMASTE!
    Good Morning,dear!
    However caring the hands may be,
    However rich the heart may be,
    Filled with love,
    I want to tell you dear,
    At times escape becomes inevitable!
    May be she loves him more than
    He loves her!
    It could be a sacrifice!
    Actions are beyond explanations.
    Dear,you know what,
    I can never escape from your thoughts!:)
    You have become so dear to me!
    I want you to be in high spirits!
    And enjoy love and friendship!
    Hey,me leaving tonight for Thrissur,
    But not escaping from anyone!
    [I would have,but changed my mind!]
    Wishing you a beautiful and lovely Sunday,
    Hugs and love,
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  15. Gyanban;

    Thanks so much! Glad you liked it!

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  16. Gyanban;

    Thanks so much! Glad you liked it!

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  17. Nethra;

    Thanks so much! I wish you the same...:))

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  18. Leo;

    Thanks a lot...:)

    You made two entries, a poem and a short story...that's great! Good luck to you!

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  19. Sourav;

    Thanks for the comment and glad u liked it!

    I wish you the same luck!

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  20. a nice poem....not everyone can understand what the other desires!!

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  21. hey there are many poems this time...but this poem was really nice...:D desires....:D

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  22. Vipul;

    Thanks for welcoming me at Blog-a-Ton!

    Glad you liked my poem and I am happy you penned another entry like it's an answer to my own post!

    Thanks again!

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  23. Rachana...

    Thanks so much...glad you like it!

    Be there soon in your space!

    :)

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  24. The Fool;

    yes, you maybe right...and I am glad for sharing such thoughts about my poem!

    Clarification? It's for the reader to treat it anyway he wants to, but what it is all about is intended for the writer, real or fiction!

    Thanks so much!

    Be dropping by your place soon!

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  25. Sureindran;

    Thank you so much and glad you like it! :)

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  26. Dear;

    Wow...what a very lovely and inspiring comment you penned here...but as always, you do it this way!

    Me, too, can't escape your post though sometimes I am too late, forgive me for being so!

    Thanks so much!

    Hugs Anu!

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  27. Mahesh;

    Thank you so much! Glad you like it!

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  28. Shahid;

    Thanks so much...but it's not an elusive poem, right?

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  29. Karan;

    yes, you are right!

    thanks so much!

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  30. Siddhesh;

    Thank you so much, glad you liked it!

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  31. Your poem leaves me with a smirk. Maybe it is not that she is so impervious to his yearning, but it is that she is afraid that should she stop flying away, he will stop coming after her.

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  32. I think we sometimes dont understand the meaning/significance of an escape, no??

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  33. Hi Saro;

    I am happy to note of various opinions on my poem and yours is just as enlightening and noticeable!

    Yes, maybe, who knows...but only the author knows I guess!

    Thanks a lot! Be there in your place soon!

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  34. Hi Saro;

    I am happy to note of various opinions on my poem and yours is just as enlightening and noticeable!

    Yes, maybe, who knows...but only the author knows I guess!

    Thanks a lot! Be there in your place soon!

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  35. Hi Swayambhu;

    I think escape is a relative word...right?

    Thanks a lot and good morning!

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  36. Hi Mehak;

    Thanks so much...I wish you the same....:))

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  37. Hello Richa!

    Thanks a ton!

    I wish you the same! :)

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  38. "Why is she so impervious to his deep yearning?"
    Well, because she is a woman. And it's hard to win a woman's heart. As simple as that. :D

    Beautifully written.
    All the best for batom!

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  39. Probably she is just pretending :) She likes him but is afraid to accept. Liked the poem. Simple, sweet and nice :)

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  40. Hi Amity, thank you for voting for me. Glad that you like it.

    Sureindran R. - Escape

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  41. Hi Karthik;

    Thanks so much! Joining Baton is a whole new experience for me!

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  42. Hi evanescentthoughts;


    yeah, you may be right...:)

    thanks for your sharing you wonderful thoughts about the poem!

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  43. Sureindran:

    yeah, i had to coz i did appreciate and liked ur escape post!

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  44. Sureindran:

    yeah, i had to coz i did appreciate and liked ur escape post!

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