Friday, November 20, 2009

A Child's Wish


Wish I can be a child
Child full of innocence
Innocence from life's harsh realities
Realities I wouldn't understand
Understand when I will be old
Old enough to have worries and cares
Worries and cares for survival
Survival of the fittest
Fittest is the name of the game
Game is this life we play
Play in a stage called world
World where human species live.

25 comments:

  1. i wish the same....so nicely written amity...i just love loop :)...beautiful lines...

    urs..hemu..

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  2. Hemu;

    thanks you wish the same...:)

    please write one, i'll be the first to comment...he he he..:)

    gud afternun!

    :)

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  3. awe..i just wish the same..seems u've reached my heart n stolen my thoughts..lol..:P
    vry beautifuly written loop..luved it..:) keep it up..!!!
    luv n hugss to u..:)

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  4. loved the loop dear loved the idea..of a child's innocence...

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  5. Hey Maddy,

    of course, all of us do and wish to be a child because we want to escape the harsh realities in life!

    everyone does believe me!

    me? if given the chance? I will go back to childhood! and immerse myself on things i have not done when i was yet a child!

    thanks Maddy!

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  6. Hello Priya,

    ...thanks dear you love it..:) everybody does, i guess!

    have a nice day!

    :)

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  7. PS: the pic is just awsum..adding to the realistic aspect of poem..:)so sweet..:)

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  8. Oooo i wish the same now :( .. the world indeed is a play for them!

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  9. Mads,

    yeah, the child looks so lovely and innocent...:)

    and she's so adorable!

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  10. HaRy;

    yes it is, you surely wish the same too!

    nice isn't it?

    :)

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  11. Hi Melissa;

    ...thank you so much!!!

    good morning!

    :)

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  12. Amity it is Great
    Great are the lines
    Lines written with Love
    Love as cute as that Kid
    Kid in your Poem

    Lovely loop, entwined in my Heart!

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  13. This one is sooo nice!!!

    I always liked loop poem!!

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  14. Dear Princess;

    I've missed you..where have you been?

    yeah, my first attempt at loop poem and thanks you like it babes!

    missed you so much dear!

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  15. it was really sweet loop poem :)

    Keep Rocking ;)

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  16. Hello Riya;

    ...thanks you're here...:)

    and thanks you loved my first try at loop poem...:)

    I've bookmarked you already so i can follow you from time to time!

    good morning!

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  17. I liked this form of poem so fluently written.Keep writing more of such stuff.

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  18. Dear Amity,
    Good Morning!
    the poem is good!the flow is wonderful!i loved the lines n the style!
    the beauty is so attractive!
    everyone once grows older, wishes to go back to the childhood,the best phase of life!keeping that in mind,let us not snatch away the wonderful innocence from the present children!
    wishing you a wonderful day,
    sasneham,
    Anu

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  19. If only I could enter that particular loop again . . . beautiful words beautifully illuminated by a perfect image. Enjoyed this one:-)

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  20. Hi KP'

    thanks so much you liked it...:)

    sure, I will!

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  21. Hello Anupama;

    glad you liked it, too!

    that inspires me also....:)

    good night!

    :)

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  22. Hello Gloria;

    glad you are here, dunno worry, i will bookmark you here so i can be updated with your post!

    be there in your site the soonest!

    g'nayt!

    :)

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